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8月30日

Argument 9

终于开始写ISSUE和ARGUMENT了,今天先写了一篇简单的ARGUMENT```ISSUE还没勇气写.....

大家可以随便对我的处女写发表意见哈,有啥子语法错误啊,啥子谦辞造句啊,啥子逻辑盲区啊,都随便提哦````帮帮忙哈,我晓得英语牛的多得很````直接QQ和MSN告诉我都可以,,,,,嘎嘎,先谢(万分感谢姚阿姨百忙中帮我修改!!)

<The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.

"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."

15年前,Omega大学实施了一项新措施,鼓励学生对所有教授的教学效果进行评价。从那以后,Omega的教授开始给予学生更高的分数,Omega的学生成绩总平均上升了30%。未来的雇主显然认为Omega的分数贬值了;这可以解释为什么Omega的毕业生找工作时没有邻近的Alpha大学毕业生成功。为使Omega毕业生找到好工作,我们应立即停止学生对教授的评价。>--------这个是题目!大哥些!

In this memo, Omega University's dean recommends that in order to enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate its professor-evaluation procedure immediately. (the university should terminate its professor-evaluation procedure immediately in order to secure the better jobs for its graduates). To validate this recommendation, the dean points out that Omega encouraged its students, by carrying out a particular procedure, to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors during the past 15 years . The dean also cites the fact that Omega University's graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University, notwithstanding the overall grade average at Omega has risen by 30%. A close scrutiny of each of these evidences reveals, however, that none of them gives little credible support to the dean's recommendation, as discussed below.

To begin with, the dean fails to establish a causal relationship between the professor-evaluation procedure and the overall grade averages of Omega's students which has risen by 30%, so( X )the dean falsely assumes that Omega's professors mendaciously assign higher grades in their classes for obtaining outstanding evaluations (which consequently) caused the grade's inflation at Omega. Lacking evidences to confirm this assumption, it is entirely possible that Omega's admission standards, during the past 15 years, has been elevated which has resulted in the grade's increase. Or, perhaps the fact that the quality of education has been ameliorated since 15 years ago (during this period) should be responsible for this increase. Without accounting for these scenarios that might contribute to the grade's increase, the dean cannot justify the claim that the grades at Omega are inflated due to the evaluation procedure.(the professor-evaluation procedure directly resulted in 30% increase of Omega's students’ overall grade averages.)

Secondly, even assuming that the evaluation procedure breeds the grade's inflation at Omega, the dean's claim that Omega's graduates' inflated grades have resulted in their inferior position of finding employments is still untenable. The dean fails to consider other possible reasons for Omega's comparatively poor job-placement. Perhaps(For example), Omega's career services are(may be) insufficient; or perhaps Omega has less job counselors than Alpha. Thus, without ruling out all these possibilities the dean cannot convince me that the inflated grades can hinder Omega's graduates from finding employments.

Finally, even if the dean can substantiate all of the foregoing assumptions, the dean also overlooks a myriad of other possible factors by which Omega can increase its job-placement record. For instance, Omega should improve its public relations or career-counseling services and hire additional job counselors to help its graduates with their resumes and interviewing skills, if (by doing) so, its graduates can find better jobs. In short, since the dean fails to take into account and rule out these possibilities, the dean's assertion that Omega might help its graduates, only by terminating its professor-evaluation procedureto have better jobs offers from prospective employers cannot be taken seriously( is not persuasive).

In sum, the argument relies on certain doubtful assumptions that render it unconvincing as it stands. To bolster  the recommendation the dean must provide clear evidence that Omega's professor-evaluation procedure has rendered the increase in grade average, and the fact that Omega's graduates are less successful in getting jobs than Alpha graduates is attributable to Omega's graduates' inflated grades. To evaluate the dean's recommendation more efficiently(effectively), I would need more information about Omega's admission standards and quality of education during the past 15 years. I would also need to know what other methods are available to Omega for enabling its graduates to win better jobs.

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郑eleven发表:
你还在北京a ?
9 月 15 日
郑旷发表:
可以了。专8作文就这个样子勒
 
9 月 11 日
菲菲发表:
哦,对了,还要补充个,面包会说话!!!!!
9 月 4 日
菲菲发表:
你不是野狗,你的主人是个冰雪聪明的女娃娃.
楼下的有位动物跟我的兴趣居然一样,好神奇哦.....
9 月 4 日
骆驼骆驼发表:
你娃疯求了……不过,这种状态我喜欢!我的空间拓荒了,沙发是没得了,不过你还是来添点人气三……
9 月 3 日
电影
9 月 1 日
哈根达斯
9 月 1 日
磨刀
9 月 1 日
祈祷
9 月 1 日
沙发哥,你学英语学疯了哦~~~~~~~~~~
8 月 31 日
XuJill发表:
啊,我现在最恨的就是看英文,所以我只把中文部分看了。
嗯,中文那段就两个字——不错。
8 月 31 日
~恐龟~发表:
我自己修改过语法错误和拼写,写之前花了时间想提纲的,,,1些词汇是用的其他类似题目的ARUGUMENT的题干
没有卡时间,,,第一篇卡时间就能写这么长我还虚啥子?
这篇的主要目的是熟悉自己准备的模板....
8 月 31 日
IrisIris发表:
你的处女作完全是自己ka到时间写的?没有翻看材料论据和词典?这是修改过得没有?
 
弓虽。。
8 月 30 日
~恐龟~发表:
姚阿姨的到来就像大雪天里有人给我送来一盆电热暖手器,,,我感觉就像在茫茫的人生路上找到了组织找到了党
8 月 30 日
糖果饼饼发表:
我妈妈来长春了,明天让她帮你看看哈.
8 月 30 日
潘伟发表:
没仔细看~~先坐坐沙发
8 月 30 日

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